Once a long time ago, In new zealand in a dark windy dull forest, there was a lonely brown cold sparrow hopping around the trees. It fell down on a bumpy path. Suddenly a tall skinny human came along and saw the sparrow lying down on a rough pathway. The human put his hands together to make a cup shape and scooped up the poor little sparrow up into his hands. Then the friendly human put the sparrow in a comfortable place.
Then one day a low voice spoke to the sparrow. The sparrow thought. It’s the god of the bird he was wondering what he wanted to say to the sparrow. The god said your tail is too short grow it longer. Then the god disappeared. The sparrow thought why he needed to grow it’s tail longer but he knew that he had to do what the god of the bird said.
He went to his family and said” how do I grow a tail “. The Mummy sparrow said “well what happened “ the sparrow said “ the god said that I have to grow my tail back. The god will be quite angry with me. ”The Mummy sparrow says “ I might have some medicine for growing tails back.“YAY” said the sparrow.
The next day the sparrow woke up , his tail was a fan. He ran down from his nest to go show off his new tail but as he was flying down the god of the bird came he said “good job little sparrow I think your tail looks so good that I will give all sparrows tails like yours. Before I go you can rename sparrows to what you want so goodbye and I will see you soon”. The god disappeared so the sparrow thought and thought what should I rename sparrows as he touched the ground of his living room he said It out loud “I GOT IT, FANTAILS” “what” said his family look at my tail” “ look at our tails” and so sparrows got renamed to fantails and they lived happily ever after.
THE END
By Alessandra & Keira
What I think Alessandra did well was the second paragragh when she was descrbing when the god of the bird came.
ReplyDeleteI think I did well on using adjectives and going back to make sure everything make sense
ReplyDeleteAlessandra, I think you used very interesting adjectives, but I think you used too many adjectives. Also, your myth is very creative! In my opinion, your next step could be: Punctuation, like using " " correctly.
ReplyDeleteAlessandra, I think you used very interesting adjectives, but I think you used too many adjectives. Also, your myth is very creative! In my opinion, your next step could be: Punctuation, like using " " correctly.
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